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    This Is A Standalone Flash Piece. I Think There Might Be Some Confusion As To Who Is Speaking? All Comments Welcome.


    Yer Wan
    -She wouldn’t wear out her tongue talking to you, Maggie, a gilly.
    -That she wouldn’t, Breda, love. A cute hoor.
    -Cute indeed. ‘Twould be a long time before she’d think of blackening her arse and going mad.
    -‘Twould surely. She wouldn’t be caught doing the donkey.
    -That she wouldn’t. Would be tucked up in bed with her mug of cocoa.
    -And saying the rosary,
    -And saying the rosary, is right. When did you last see her, Maggie?
    -Down the docks of a Friday night.
    -Down the docks, eh? What might she be up to down there?
    -Isn’t that the question? Not her normal--- habitat.
    -No, indeed then.
    -And her such a teacher’s pet at school long ’go.
    -Ah sure, Sister Concepta used to be weak for her.
    -Weak for her altogether.
    -Come here to me, Maggie, isn’t there a pawn shop down the docks now?
    -A pawn shop? By God, you’re right.
    -Maybe she’s fallen on hard times?
    -That’d be some come-down for her.
    -Or maybe she had other business in those parts?
    -Other business, is right.
    -I meant to ask you, Maggie, how’s your Jamie getting along?
    -Not a bother on him, not a bother at all.
    -Only, I thought I saw his name in the paper?
    -Ah, you must be mistaken. Sure there’s more Jamie Kingstons than one.
    -This fella was put off the road for three years.
    -Is that right?
    -That’s right, a gilly.
    -I wonder now, what was yer wan doing down the docks of a Friday night?
    -They gave his address an’ all.
    -What do you mean? His address?
    -In the paper, like.
    -Is that the time? I’ll have to make tracks.
    -We haven’t got to the bottom of our mystery.
    -What mystery?
    -Yer wan swanning off down the docks.
    -Yera, I’m only after thinking of it now.
    -Thinking of what?
    -Someone said her sister moved into one of them houses down there.
    -Is that right?
    -That’s right. Them refurbished houses. I’ll be off now so. Doesn’t do to be talking.
    -Doesn’t do at all then.
    -See ya next week.

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  • Comments

    1. Boris Johnson

      I don’t think it really matters if you know or not who is talking. You knows it’s a back and fourth between two women so you don’t really need to knows which ones is which. Once your brain stops trying to figure out who is talking it’s an enjoyable read. There was one part that felt somewhat out of place when they are talking about the son and one of women says “I wonder now, what was yer wan doing down the docks of a Friday night?“ which is ignored. That would be the only thing I’d take out. I’d love to have heard a few more possible reasons the woman they are talking about is going down the docks. You could have a lot of fun with that. I like that back and fourth Roddy Doyle style of two people gabbing.


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    1. Geraldine

      Thanks so much for taking the time to comment, Boris,


      Posted 8 months ago


    1. Big Daddy Kane

      I’d agree with Boris. That one line seemed bit out of place. Especially considering they do come back to talking about the woman. Was a fun read all the same. Would love to read a few more conversations between them. Hope you write a few more.


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    1. Geraldine

      Thanks a million for your comment, Big Daddy Kane.


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